Gangam Style

He likes girls

"Hey sexy lady"
City
Bus
Subway
Elevator
Dancing kid
Yellow Jacket
Dance Moves
Hot tub

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-Audience: People my age or close to it.
-I talked about something that a lot of people my age would agree with.
-It fit in with the design nicely.

ADVERTISIN SHIT

The play on Nike's "Just Do It" campaign in this ad  is them saying "Just Douche It" because the guy is wearing athletic clothing and he is eating unhealthy stuff, making him look like a douche bag. Nike clothing has been associated with douche bags for some time now and this ad recognizes that and pokes fun at it. They even use colors synonymous with douche bag guys and they capture the true essence of a douche bag with his sun glasses.

Advertising Thing

In Us Magizine, there is an advertisment for Mott's apple sauce showing a woman being hugged by her son. People who see this will feel good because it's really cute and moms who see this will be influenced to by Motts because they want that loving relationship with their child.The ad is promoting a family lifestyle showing a happy family makes people want to have a family. The ad makes me think if I bought Motts for my child that they would be happy and love me. The audience is the mothers who read Us and even single woman who would want children in the future. I wish my mom gave me Mott's, even though I hate apple sauce. At the bottom Mott's boasts the nutrional value of their snack which also would encourage a mother to buy the apple sauce for their child. The background of the adverisment is a bright yellow creating a happy thought and the mother and son are very good looking and well-kempt showing that upperclass people should get this snack too.

Class Blogger 10/29

Things we are planning on doing today:
-Discuss Reading
-Free writing
-Sharing (If time allows)
-Homework: Bring to class 1-2 magazines or newspapers you read regularly.

A.) Reading Discussion: (Suggestions from passage)
1. Find a subject you care about. If you care about it, writing becomes easier.
2.  Don't ramble. (Irrelevant items, run-on sentences, etc.)
3. Keep it simple. Avoid long, complex sentences with big words that have no meaning.
4. Have the guts to cut. Cutting unnecessary thoughts will help your writing.
5. Sound like yourself. Creating your own tone and voice will improve your writing.(Like how Floridians, particularity douche Floridians, say "fire" for good. Or Boston natives say "wicked")
6. Say what you need to say. (Pg. 587)
7. Pity the readers.

B.) Free Writing
-20 Minutes to write.
-Editing after writing.
-Some people wrote with topics provided by Ms. Lang, others with whatever came to their mind.
-It's really cold outside.

Free Writing 10/29

It was 1:35 AM in an orange 1997 Pontiac, two heavy set 23 year old's were clumsily working towards losing their virginity. The portly young man made countless attempts to enter his big bodied counterpart but sexual inexperience proved to be a roadblock. An air of uncomfortably filled the cramp sedan as the two grew frustrated with their inabilities. After about ten minutes of unsuccessful attempts at insertion the hefty gentleman had arrived at his destination, sexual ecstasy. "This is what my not fat friends talk about" he thought has excitement filled his entire body. The rotund lass that accompanied him felt a feeling of shame and disappointment, as her dreams of this interaction had been more grand that what the chubby fellow was providing her. Tens of seconds had past and the man had gather some confidence about himself as he began to feel light-headed, "Oh no", he thought and seconds later came the conclusion of the outing. He hung his husky head in disappointment, she laid and meaty hand on his beating chest and said "Hey good stuff, that wasn't too bad at all!"



Editing:

It was 1:35 AM in an orange 1997 Pontiac, two heavy set 23 year old's were clumsily working towards losing their respective virginity. The portly young man made countless attempts to enter his big bodied counterpart but sexual inexperience proved to be a roadblock. An air of uncomfortably filled the small sedan as the two grew frustrated with their inabilities. After about ten minutes of unsuccessful attempts at insertion the hefty gentleman had arrived at his destination of sexual ecstasy. "This is what my not fat friends talk about" he thought has excitement filled his entire body. The rotund lass that accompanied him felt a feeling of shame and disappointment, as her dreams of this interaction had been more grand that what the chubby fellow was providing her. Tens of seconds had past and the man had gathered some confidence about himself as he began to feel light-headed, "Oh no", he thought and seconds later came the conclusion of the outing. He hung his husky head in disappointment, she laid and meaty hand on his beating chest and said "Hey good stuff, that wasn't too bad at all!"

Paper 2 and Shitttttttttttt

I appreciate the feedback I got on my paper. I am happy to hear that my paper is heading in the correct direction and I will take the advice given about how to move forward and hopefully do well on the paper. I will touch more on Obama's upbringing and background and shine more light on how he serves as a cultural icon for the people of his likeness.

1. In this image there is a leopard biting the throat of an antelope and a happy family behind it.

2. It's composed like a totally normal family photo and how they're smiling while an animal is being killed in front of them is noteworthy. The fact that the family is very uninterested by this happening is interesting to me.

3. This is a short, specific story. The story of how a family took a picture behind a leopard mauling an antelope.

4. As a person who would be uncomfortable standing near that I see this picture and find it very odd and don't understand why somebody would take it.

Introduction and Conclusions

1. I touch only very briefly on the subject of the essay, leaving the reader curious. The way I do introduce my point, however, is in my eyes tantalizing and will attract the reader.

2. I recap my points briefly my points while at the same time inviting the reader to possibly consider to themselves how music has effected their lives personally.

3. It really doesn't answer it. I guess I'll have to change that. It kinda is like 4 sentences about what music has impacted in my life and then ends, I'll fix it tonight don't you worry!

Peer Revision on My Super Rad Essay

My partner was really cool during the peer revision. He gave me some ideas for how to improve upon my writing. He suggested possibly cutting back on the cursing in the essay which I will take into consideration. He said it had  a good tone and it was well organized which was cool to hear. I think there's not much left to change and I'm pretty confident about my essay.

Essay 1 Feedback

In my essay I will eliminate broad declarations of saying the world has changed completely. Just because different genres of music are slightly different than they were in the past does not mean that things have changed very drastically. Also I will rewrite examples where I compare two genres of music that have nothing to do with one another. There are more specific examples of how I can write about the way things changed for me personally and assume that the changes that occurred personally for myself are not true for the rest of the world who come from different circumstance. I will make more of a point to analyze the way I viewed the world based on the music I listened to. There are opportunities for me to improve my essay in many facets and I plan on doing so! ()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()()

Draft Peer Revision

My partners allowed as to how I be sure to include specific detailed stories with my essay to ensure that the point I'm making is clear. They had positive things to say about what I had planned. My essay is about how social media has effected my life drastically. I need to include the lessons I learned from my usage of social media through the years and go far in depth telling the stories that I eluded to in my outline. They provided advice on how to organize the essay based on the years I tell stories from in a chronological order to show a maturing in my life.

John Wayne Stuff

From watching John Wayne, Didion was introduced to many ideas of how a man is to carry himself as well as how a woman should herself. John Wayne was displayed as a tough, strong man who would handle situations physically if needed. He was presented as a protector, somebody who could solve any problem that arouse for the woman-folk. Didion also learned women were intended to be at the beck and call of their man. Didion, presumably, had some alterations to her concept of men due to her exposure to John Wayne. Men, in her eyes, were supposed to be something that was risky, tough, adventurous guy.


A band that has effected my life is the hip-hop collective Odd Future. Odd Future is possibly one of the most vulgar collective in music history, with vicious declarations against people, groups and ideas. Odd Future (OFWGKTA for shortened version of their elongated name) always represented a group that strives off individuality and uses vulgarity and crude humor to pass along their ideas of how one should live, care-free and individually. OF's ring-leader Tyler, the Creator has composed several songs diving much deeper into darker thoughts which has always been interested and thought provoking for me.

Shitty Blog Post About Anne Lammot's "Shitty First Drafts"

1.  Anne Lammot's "Shitty First Drafts" I was wondering what goes through my head when I write a first draft. I assume that writers what they write was good, similar to me when I write equally as shitty first drafts. Writing a good essay isn't easy, it takes a few tries. I guess to write a not so shitty final draft you have to start with a shitty first draft. Most first drafts I usually write are usually completely changed by the time I finish them. Lammot's viewpoint was interesting and right on the money. It can be tough to get your thoughts out sometime.

2.  When I write I try to make it as close to the final draft as possible. I don't like revising my work because then I feel like my original work wasn't good enough. Which I know is not necessarily the case, editing is used to make the essay better. When I write I try to think of my ideas as I'm writing, at least for the first draft, which can make the work somewhat disorganized. If I am confident on the topic I will write much faster and better but if I am writing about something I do not feel comfortable with I will write short, shitty sentences and paragraph that repeat the same point for the most part. On these essays where I don't know what I'm talking about I tend to need the most editing, not surprisingly. Writing can be enjoyable to me if I know the topic because it feeds my ego when I feel smart for knowing things about whatever I'm writing. In these essays my writing process is really easy. On essays where I stumble through with little established content then I just finish writing the shitty draft and have somebody else look at it and brutalize it then give it back to me and I'll try to make it look not so shitty.

3.  My writing style is losing your virginity. At first it's very uncomfortable and awkward but as I write more it gets better and enjoyable for everybody involved.